For this piece of writing I have focussing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to: - delete the ones that are not at the standard you are aiming for
use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8)
The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal
Uncle Chans unlucky day
Ring! Ring! Ring! Goes the school bell. Uncle Chan and his friends were discussing about something after school then they remembered, they an important dancing competition on Sunday and they haven't practiced in a while because they were busy the whole week. Uncle Chan and his friend made a meeting spot at school and a time, Uncle Chan got his stuff and walked to the meeting spot right after.
While Uncle Chan was walking to the meeting spot at school he felt wind breezing down his neck. Luckily he brought a jacket with him, when he got to the meeting spot it's got more windy and Uncle Chan and his friends were all freezing but they all had jackets, then the group just practiced anyway, after awhile it got really windy. Then one of Uncle Chan friends saw a big gray pile of things in the air, then Uncle Chan knew it was a tornado, everyone nearby were screaming and running while taking important things, Uncle Chan and his friend just stood there for a little bit because they were in shock.
Then Uncle Chan and his friends reacted and then uncle chan quickly got his speakers, phone and ran, and Uncle Chans friends then grab his items and quickly ran with Uncle Chan. They were running away from the tornado and all they can hear is “AHHHHHHHHHH” everyone is screaming their lives off. Then they decided to run to Uncle Chans house to stay and hope the tornado goes away, then Uncle Chan and and his friends run into his house and just pray the tornado will stop.
The tornado got closer and closer but then and soon as it got to Uncle Chans house the tornado stop just before it did any damage to his house. A month later uncle chan and his friends decided to have a to practice for the big tournament that got postponed till the following Sunday, uncle chans and his friends practice for a week and got second place.